We know we have done this when we have done these things.
The Switch
WALT: use adjectives and similes in our descriptive writing.
I'm sitting in the crowd I'm the ball boy I have a soccer ball in my hand I cheer for my idol Cristiano Ronaldo
He is chasing the colorful ball he slips on the spiky green grass he leaps
I try to move but know one can hear me over the loud screaming off fans.
Ouch I say that really hurt I go home really nauseous and dizzy I jump in My big bed I wake up I go stand in front shiny mirror. I yarn ah what has happened? I go down stairs the lady gives me the little black keys um ….Man what’s this for? She does not answer um OK thanks? I reply I stare at the car for like a minute who’s car is this? I say they say that’s your car silly. I just go with it they go inside I jump in, wow this is cool I turn the car on brr smash right into the flat wall whiter than someone's teeth.
I arrived for practice everyone stares at my car hi I say they all reply um Hi are you OK? Yep I say I leave I go into the gate everyone is still staring.
So I go practice my football and get ready for the game suddenly when The game comes … hey kid I look at his shoes he has the same shoes as me We play the game bang we crash heads I feel normal again I get up and go home.
Ola my name is Alex and I am from GreyMouth in the South Island New Zealand.I am typing Grey Main school. I like how you have written lot's and lots detail I think that you have done a great job. Do you know anything else from this topic
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Aloha Madi. My name is Ruby and I am from Mamaku 2.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your writing it has so much punctuation, adjectives and detail. Have you been working on The Switch this week?
Thank you for your comment Ruby B
DeleteNo me and my class have not been working on the switch this week
but we did last week.
Kia Ora, Madi and my name is Corianna and I am from Mamaku 2 I think that your writing was very good you wrote heaps and you explained what you were doing. I also really like all your Punctuation and your describing words. Maybe next time you could add in your Next Step Learning. Also if you have the time please visit my blog
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DeleteKia Ora Corianna thank you for your comment.
DeleteI will Make sure I will visit your blog to.
Kia ora, Madi my name is Bodie and I am from Grey Main School.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you used punctuation and you did a good job on writing a lot of words on your page. Next time you could Check your spelling Because some of your words don't make sense. Kei runga noa. atu! (Great work)